1 ---完形填空与情景作文的有效整合之打工经历高三专项训练 高三英语写作专项训练 ---完形填空与情景作文的有效整合之打工经历 北京十二中 蒋炎富
2 Understanding of the writing task你准备参加《新东方英语》杂志正在举办的中学生英语作文竞赛。请根据以下四幅图画，描述寒假期间你在一家麦当劳快餐店打工的经历，并简单写出你的感受。 注意：词数不少于60。 During the winter holidays, I found a job at McDonald’s near my home. _____________
3 Understanding of the Chinese and English instruction你准备参加《新东方英语》杂志正在举办的中学生英语作文竞赛。请根据以下四幅图画，描述寒假期间你在一家麦当劳快餐店打工的经历，并简单写出你的感受。 注意：词数不少于60。 During the winter holidays, I found a job at McDonald’s near my home. ______. 中文 English style who when where what how words opening sentence 作文竞赛——描述经历 Narration of a working experience 你 I 寒假期间 During the winter holidays 麦当劳 At McDonald’s 打工经历 Working experience 感受 Feeling (present tense) At least 60 words 不少于60 Place, time---past tense
4 Understanding of the picturesContents Key words P1 main point supporting details proper inference P2 job responsibility clear the tables sweeping and mopping the floor ① slow˗˗smooth hold birthday parties three kids say “happy birthday” ② enjoy the party
5 Understanding of the picturesContents Key words P3 main point supporting details proper inference P4 help foreigners be confused help in English ③ feel proud and get admiration get payment holidays end and get paid buy clothes for parents ④ Parents’ feeling
6 Outline of the passage 总： 分： 开头概述（who, when, where, what, how） 要点 细节During the winter holidays, I found a job at McDonald’s near my home. _____________. I have learnt a lot from this experience. 要点 细节 恰当推理或心情 （过去时） （现在时） 结尾感受 (从要点和细节中来）
7 Ending of the passage: feelingresponsibility sacrifice the meaning of happiness self-value the importance of learning what work allows me to have 感受——结尾(feeling)
8 Language input—homeworkB: 2007福建完形 C: 2007湖南完形 Content Sentence number A B C 工作时间地点 工作内容 工作要求 工作过程 工作成果 工作感受 其他 ① ④ ① ① ⑥ ⑦ ② ⑤ ② ③ ⑥ ⑧ ④ ⑤ ② ⑨ ③ ⑨ ⑩ ⑦ ⑩ 11 12 13 ⑧ ⑨ ⑩ 14 15 16
9 Understanding of the sentencesand learn to use ——工作时间地点 ①I was six when I joined my father and two elder brothers at sunrise in the fields. ④I got my first real job, at JM’s Restaurant in town, when I was 12. ⑥Every day after school I would head to JM ’ s and work until ten. ⑦Even on Saturdays I worked from two until eleven. ①From age 12 on, I did part-time jobs after school. ①One evening in early April, my mother told me to fill in at the snack bar for a worker who had the flu. P1
10 Understanding of the sentencesand learn to use ——工作内容 ②By the time I was eight I was helping Dad fix up old furniture. ⑤My main responsibilities （职责）were clearing tables and washing dishes, but sometimes I helped cook. ②life in the navy centered around completing daily tasks. ③These could be anything from cleaning the camp to conducting mock (模拟的) battles. ⑥The part of my job I enjoyed most was the counseling (咨询) meeting I held with the family members of the men and women in my charge, trying to help them deal with the long periods of separation. ⑧Before long I was being asked to give encouraging speeches to business groups, educators and kids across the country. P1 P1 P1 P2 P2
11 Understanding of the sentencesand learn to use ——工作要求 ④Completing these tasks successfully required discipline, team-work and responsibility. ⑤everyone worked together for the good of the company. P1 P2
12 Understanding of the sentencesand learn to use ——工作过程 ②I told her I would mess it up, because I had never worked at the bar before. ③I worried that instead of making money, I would end up owing it. ④At first, I was really slow at taking the orders and making change. ⑤I was so nervous that my hands shook, and I broke a cup into pieces. ⑥What a mess! ⑦Then my mother came to help me. ⑧Things went more smoothly after that. ⑨By the end of the day, I could remember orders, add up the bill, and make change quickly with a smile. P2 P1 P3 P1 P3 P4&ending
13 Understanding of the sentencesand learn to use ——工作成果 ③He gave me a cent for every nail I pulled out of old boards. ⑨I didn’t necessarily like work, but I loved what working allowed me to have. ⑩Because of my job I was always the one buying when my friends and I went to the local Tastee Freez This made me proud Word that I was trustworthy and hard-working got around town. I was making only 65 cents an hour. ⑦These proved popular and word of them spread ⑩My mother said she was proud of me ending 11 P3 12 P3 13 P4
14 Understanding of the sentencesand learn to sue ——工作感受 ⑧At that age it was difficult going to work and watching my friends run off to swim or play. So I learned early the danger of easy credit. My first job taught me self-control, responsibility and brought me a level of personal satisfaction few of my friends had experienced. If you understand sacrifice（奉献） and responsibility, there are not many things in life you can’t have. How right it is! ⑨I consider the boot camp my first real job, and my life is still guided by the important lessons I learned there. ⑩It taught me discipline, friendship and the pride related to setting a task every day and working hard to achieve it. P1 14 15 Ending feeling 16
15 Learn to use Contents Key words Sentences P1 main point Job duty A: B:supporting details clear tables sweeping and moping proper inference slow---smooth P2 birthday party three kids say “happy birthday” enjoy the party 5 6 8 2 3 4 7 8 ① 4 6 8 ② 2 3
16 Learn to use Contents Key words Sentences P3 main pointhelp foreigners A: B: C: supporting details be confused help in English proper inference feel proud P4 get payment buy clothes for parents parents’ feeling 11 12 10 5 7 ③ ④ 10 9
17 learn to use ---ending 感受——结尾(feeling) A: B: C: responsibilitysacrifice the meaning of happiness self-value the importance of learning what work allows me to have 感受——结尾(feeling) A: B: C: 14 15 16 9 10
18 While-writing Student A: Attention: opening and picture 1 tenseStudent B: picture 2 Student C: picture 3 Student D: picture 4 and ending (feeling) Attention: tense outline main point and supporting details proper inference use what has been learned
19 While-writing
20 Evaluation 人称 时态 main point supporting details proper inferenceuse the sentences Picture 1 □yes □no □0 □1 □2 □3 □4 □0 □1 □2 □3 Picture 2 Picture 3 Picture 4 feeling 总体评价 □very good □good □average □improved
21 Classmates’ good writingHow to improve writing Cloze test Reading Possible version writing Classmates’ good writing ………..
22 Writing is a matter of accumulation!How to improve writing Writing is a matter of accumulation!
23 homework Polish your writing so that it makes a sample writing for the working experience
24 高三专项训练 ---完形填空与情景作文的有效整合 Thank you!
25 完形与写作1 —— 2003北京夏完形 My First JobI was six when I joined my father and two elder brothers at sunrise in the fields of Eufaula, Okla. By the time I was eight I was helping Dad fix up old furniture. He gave me a cent for every nail I pulled out of old boards. I got my first real job, at JM’ s Restaurant in town, when I was 12. My main responsibilities （职责）were clearing tables and washing dishes, but sometimes I helped cook. Every day after school I would head to JM’ s and work until ten. Even on Saturdays I worked from two until eleven. At that age it was difficult going to work and watching my friends run off to swim or play. I didn’t necessarily like work, but I loved what working allowed me to have. Because of my job I was always the one buying when my friends and I went to the local Tastee Freez. This made me proud.
26 完形与写作1 —— 2003北京夏完形 Word that I was trustworthy and hard-working got around town. A local clothing store offered me credit although I was only in seventh grade. I immediately charged a $ 68 sports coat and a $ 22 pair of shoes. I was making only 65 cents an hour, and I already owed the storekeeper $ 90! So I learned early the danger of easy credit. I paid it off as soon as I could. My first job taught me self-control, responsibility and brought me a level of personal satisfaction few of my friends had experienced. As my father, who worked three jobs, once told me, “If you understand sacrifice（奉献） and responsibility, there are not many things in life you can’t have.” How right he was.
27 完形与写作2 —— 2007福建 I grew up in a tiny Baltimore row house in a faraway mountain area. My parents provided the necessities of life but they couldn’t give much more. If I asked my father for a pair of jeans, he would say, “If you want them, make the money and buy them yourself.” He wasn’t being mean; he just couldn’t afford them. From age 12 on, I did part-time jobs after school. When I graduated from high school, I joined the navy. Soon I was in a boot camp (新兵训练营) at Parris Island, S. C., where I learned that life in the navy centered around completing daily tasks. These could be anything from cleaning the camp to conducting mock (模拟的) battles. Completing these tasks successfully required discipline, team-work and responsibility. It didn’t matter whether you were black, white or Asian; everyone worked together for the good of the company.
28 完形与写作2 —— 2007福建 I went on to graduate from the U.S. Naval Academy and later became an officer in the navy. The part of my job I enjoyed most was the counseling (咨询) meeting I held with the family members of the men and women in my charge, trying to help them deal with the long periods of separation. These proved popular and word of them spread. Before long I was being asked to give encouraging speeches to business groups, educators and kids across the country. But I consider the boot camp my first real job, and my life is still guided by the important lessons I learned there. It taught me discipline, friendship and the pride related to setting a task every day and working hard to achieve it.
29 完形与写作3 —— 2007湖南 When I was young, my parents ran a snack bar in our small town. One evening in early April, my mother told me to fill in at the snack bar for a worker who had the flu. I told her I would mess it up, because I had never worked at the bar before. I worried that instead of making money, I would end up owing it. “You can do it,” said my mother, “Besides, you won’t get much business until lunch.” “But I’ll never remember the orders, and I’m no good with money. Please, Mom, don’t make me. “Then I’ll help you,” she said. I shrugged my shoulders. I thought my mother’s idea was a bad one, but I obeyed.
30 完形与写作3——2007湖南 When I got to the bar the next day, I found my mother was wrong. Because the weather that day was rainy and cold, people wanted hot snacks and drinks. At first, I was really slow at taking the orders and making change. The line of people grew, and everybody seemed impatient, I was so nervous that my hands shook, and I broke a cup into pieces. What a mess! Then my mother came to help me, and she also showed me how to make change. If someone gave me $ 5 for something that cost $ 3.25, I handed over three quarters and a dollar and said, “75 cents makes four dollars, plus one dollar makes five.” Things went more smoothly after that. By the end of the day, I could remember orders, add up the bill, and make change quickly with a smile. I was even a little disappointed when the sun came out and dried up business. My mother said she was proud of me, and when she suggested that I work at the snack bar again next year, I did not even shrug. I was too busy imagining the restaurant I would open one day.